I clinged tight onto the silver rail as I peeked my eyes over my feet looking down at the clear blue water. I could see the bright golden sun reflecting on the crystal clear water. Splash!! Bubbles of water appear floating above the water as my annoying older brother jumps off. Anxiously I count down in my head getting ready to jump off. 3,2,1!!. Ahhhh!! I scream as I cautiously let go of the silver rail which was keeping me from falling off. After I jump of I look up at the bridge and notice that it wasn't that high!! On my way back up to the bridge I pass my Mum with her camera, I have a peek at me on camera and boy o boy they were bad my face looked like a smashed up pumpkin!! ¨Last time round my Dad constantly yelled in a piercing voice, at least that was after the fifty times I had jumped with him telling me we were going. We packed up our stuff and headed home. What a day I had said to myself!!
Tuesday, August 27, 2019
Bridge Jumping!!
Today in room 2 we had to choose a moment in time that we felt worried or we were had that feeling that we were scared. My writting includes descriptive language, similies and adjectives. My goal for my writting this week was to put my puncuation in the right places. Enjoy my writting and please leave a helpful comment.
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Hello my name is Krowzhynn Morrell i am 9 years old and i work at Te Hapara school. bridge jumping is probably scary... i bet bridge jumping is very fun! anyway i have never been bridge jumping before,i want to know what it's like.
ReplyDeleteMy face would probably look like a smashed up pumpkin too, if i did bridge jumping of course.
ReplyDeleteHi Samara my name is Marley from Te Hapara school!
ReplyDeleteI like going bridge jumping,did you like it? and why did you like it?
Hi Marley, To Anzwer youré question I dont mind bridge jumping, I like it because I liked jumping into the water down below
DeleteHi Samara, I am Nevaeh from Te Hapara School.
ReplyDeleteI like your topic and I thought you had some great descriptive words.
Although I liked your writing next time you should proofread your sentences to make sure that it makes sense.
Hi Neveah, Thank you for the comments they were very helpful thanks for the corrections.
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